IMAGE OF JESUS Year 10 Religion TASK: You are to present before the class your personal image of Jesus. CRITERIA: Your presentation must Include references to Mark's Gospel /7 Show an understanding of Jesus' words and actions /7 Be interesting and clear /6 Religion Oral How I see Jesus Everyone sees Jesus in a different way, physically and what he is like in the inside. Not he's guts and blood bus he's feelings and emotions. Today I am going to tell you what I think Jesus is like in the inside. To me Jesus is just like a normal man. Even though he may have different qualities I believe that he is like an everyday man. Jesus is a special man. Throughout the gospel of Mark He has achieved a great number of things. Jesus was a helping man and even now after he has died and risen he is still a huge help to many people. Today people turn to Jesus when times get tough. They ask Jesus for help and for forgiveness. Jesus does not directly give people help but he helps lead them to it. In the gospel of mark chapter 1: 29-34 " Jesus heals many at Simon's house". During this section Jesus heals Simon's mother in-law who had a fever. Today if a loved one is lying in hospital bed or if they are sick that person often turns to Jesus to help the sick persons get over or overcome their sickness no matter hoe serious it is. Jesus was a very kind man. Kind enough to heal a paralytic, chapter 2: 1-12. When Jesus was around people did not go near the sick people especially those who were paralytics. Even though Jesus was able to perform these miracles, I still believe that he was the same as a normal man. I believe this as just before Jesus died, chapter 15: 33-41, he yells out " My God, My God, why have you forsaken me?" This truly means he was normal not a magical person that can save himself and others from anything bad that may happen in the world. In conclusion to me Jesus was a normal men, he was a kind man, a loving man, a caring man and a truthful man. Jesus is a man that will always be there for me through the good times and the bad times Thankyou. 350 words. Page1
Genre: achieving different purposes level of scaffolding Independently written based on instructions and assessment criteria schematic structure organises the text: rhetorical questions: What are the best strategies? conjunctions: First, Next, Finally, In addition noun group in place of conjunctions: Another reason, One of the main arguments, The principle cause of the increase phrases and dependent clauses of cause: As a result of the rain, Struggling to survive, Despite his poor health phrases and dependent clauses of time, place, manner: Born in 1898, When we had finished, With great care interpersonal elements: Personally, Obviously, In fact, It is apparent non-finite clauses: Selecting a topic topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil existential subject to introduce new information: There layout: subheadings, diagrams, pictures a title, first paragraph which introduces topic, a series of statements about the topic with references to the Bible, conclusion, thank you to the audience conjunctions: Even though, In conclusion cause: Even though Jesus was able to perform these miracles time, place, manner: To me, In the gospel of Mark topic words: Jesus, Everyone initiate and close: closes with Thank You builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this, these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns - synonyms / antonyms - words that go together: lodge complaint - word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary, dominant, recessive - classification: teeth - canines, molars, premolars, incisors - composition (whole-part): tooth - enamel, dentine, pulp, nerve conjunctions to join sentences: Next, So, Therefore, Hence, Conversely reference items: Everyone, a, he, the, he s (his), I, you, they, them, it, many, a loved one, that person, the sick person(s), their, those, these, this, himself, others, anything, me, there vocabulary patterns - synonyms/antonyms: Jesus/a normal man/ an everyday man/ a special man/ a helping man/ a very kind man/the same as a normal man/ a kind man/a loving man/ a caring man/a truthful man, physically/in the inside, feelings/emotions, think/believe, died/risen, good times/bad times - words that go together: no matter, the good times and the bad times - word sets: hospital bed, sick, sickness, serious, heal, paralytics, fever - classification: sick people - paralytics joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, or, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since, when, so / so that, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which was completed in 1869, non-finite clauses: The team, having seen the results, felt, Having seen the results, the team, To improve the final product projections: Scientists claim that exercise prolongs life. linking: and, but, or binding: even though, after, when, if, as non-finite clauses: to help projections: I believe that he is like an everyday man, I still believe that he was the same as a normal man Page2
Field: expressing ideas and experiences noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers: television, a book, the pencil, all day, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best what he is like in the inside, Not he s (his) guts and blood bus (but) he s (his) feelings and emotions, different qualities, an everyday man, a special man, the gospel of Mark, a great number of things, a helping man, a huge help to many people, the gospel of mark chapter 1: 29-34, Simon s mother in-law, a loved one, the sick person(s) their sickness, a very kind man, those who were paralytics, these miracles, the same as a normal man, not a magical person that can save himself and others from anything bad that may happen in the world, a normal men (man), a kind man, a loving man, a caring man and a truthful man, a man that will always be there for me just like, kind enough to heal a paralytic, the same nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty, risk, government, capability, potential miracles, feelings, emotions, a loved one, sickness, paralytic, forgiveness verbs: action: subtract, peered, scanned, demolish mental (sensing): knew, believe, understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, shouted, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has, consists of, represents, means verbal groups: wanted to improve, tried estimating phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd, look it up, put up with, put off, put out action: achieved, died, risen, turn, give, heals, lying, help, overcome, go, save mental (sensing): sees, think, believe, forsaken saying: tell, ask relational: is, have, get, happen, means verbal groups: am going to tell, helps lead, able to perform phrasal verbs: get over, yells out, be there for causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods, the cause of the injury phrases: because of the heat, in spite of the rain dependent clauses: because the weather was bad, owing to the cyclone threat, if the cyclone hits, in order to end the suffering phrases: for help and forgiveness dependent clauses: when times get tough, if a loved one is lying in a hospital bed or if they are sick, Even though Jesus was able to perform these miracles, as just before Jesus died circumstances and clauses: when: in 1614, when he arrived where: at the sign, standing on stage how: carefully, with great care, like a leopard with whom / what: with his friend, with their belongings metaphors: get it off your chest when: Today, even now, still, after he has died, During this section, often, When Jesus was around, just before, through the good times and the bad times where: in (on) the inside, Throughout the gospel of Mark, to Jesus, to it, In the gospel of Mark, at Simon s house, in (a) hospital bed, near the sick people how: in a different way, physically, just like a normal man, like an everyday man, directly technical vocabulary: digest, high sugar levels, niacin quoting and referencing: direct speech: The police officer said, There were no injuries. reported speech: The manager of the team said that they were referencing: Scientists believe that, According to the weather bureau, Studies have shown gospel, Jesus, Mark, miracles, heal, died and risen, forgiveness, My God, paralytic direct: he yells out My God, My God, why have you forsaken me? reported: They ask Jesus for help and for forgiveness referencing - direct: In the gospel of mark chapter 1: 29-34 Jesus heals many at Simon s house.; - indirect: Throughout the gospel of Mark, Kind enough to heal a paralytic, chapter 2: 1-12 Page3
Tenor: interacting with others speech functions: statements, questions, offers, commands subjectivity / objectivity: subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the prime minister a series of statements expressed in simple and complex sentences subjective: To me, I believe objective: Today people turn to Jesus modality: certainty: possibly, it suggests, tend to, might be able to, I am sure, will obligation: necessarily, must, demand, they forced frequency: tendency, typical, always inclination: like, willing, preference certainty: I think, may have, may happen frequency: still, often, through the good times and the bad times, always interpersonal meaning: feelings, attitudes: It s beautiful, very, rude, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour culturally specific references: dressed in black names to refer to people feelings, attitudes: just, normal, everyday, special, a great number of things, tough, still, even, help, forgiveness, directly, lying in (a) hospital bed, serious, kind enough, especially, truly, no matter, loving, caring, truthful idioms, humour: the good times and the bad times, guts, a huge help, a loved one, be there for me cultural references: Jesus, the gospel of Mark, Simon s house, God names: Jesus, Simon, Mark, My God appropriateness of tenor uses an informal and subjective tenor which is appropriate for a personal response although the use of guts and blood is a less delicate choice for a formal presentation Page4
Mode: creating spoken and written texts tenses: primary: past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was sleeping, wanted to go, haven t played, was going to have to play primary: mainly present, simple past and some future secondary - accurate: has achieved, has died, risen passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by the heavy rain. active voice used as is appropriate when describing actions, and giving personal opinions foregrounding: referencing: According to the statistics, As shown in the data abstract elements: The destruction of the habitat conjunctions including those in second place: Success, on the other hand, phrases and dependent clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place, manner including consecutive phrases of time, place: In Canberra in 1975 non-finite clauses non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw existential subject to introduce new information interpersonal elements conjunctions: In conclusion cause: Even though he may have different qualities, Even though Jesus was able to perform these miracles time, place, manner: Today, To me, Throughout the gospel of Mark, In the gospel of mark chapter 1: 29-34, During this section, When Jesus was around non-human: Not he s (only is he) guts and blood, This (=Jesus cry) human: Everyone, Jesus, They, I appropriateness of foregrounding coherence: introduction, topic sentences and conclusion, and the links between them sentences have been foregrounded in a variety of ways, though with limited foregrounding of abstract elements which would be more appropriate; circumstances of time are used appropriately to make comparisons between modern times and Jesus life and actions; personal pronouns foreground the student s personal opinion; references to sections of the Bible are appropriately foregrounded to introduce evidence for opinion well organised text with an elementary introduction and conclusion uses topic sentences and appropriate elaboration print conventions: handwriting: letter formation, spacing, direction spelling: link to pronunciation and visual patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation abbreviations: cm, 2 nd, eg spelling: a few errors hoe (how), he s (his) punctuation: appropriately uses basic punctuation, quotation marks, chapter references multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images, sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text script prepared for oral presentation is in continuous written prose Page5