Editing, Revising, and More for Grade 4 Student Assessment Table of Contents Teacher s Manual Student Page Assessment 1: Autumn p. 17 p. 1 Assessment 1: Apple Picking p. 18 p. 2 Assessment 2: Election Day p. 31 p. 3 Assessment 2: Pilgrims p. 32 p. 4 Assessment 3: Kawanzaa pp. 48-49 pp. 5-6 Assessment 3: Cranberries p. 50 p. 7 Assessment 4: Recycling Trees p. 58 p. 8 Assessment 4: A New Year pp. 59-60 pp. 9-10 Assessment 4: Winter Sports p. 61 p. 11 Assessment 5: The Groundhog pp. 77-78 pp. 12-13 Assessment 5: February 14 th pp. 79-80 pp. 14-15 Assessment 6: 100 Days of School pp. 97-98 pp. 16-17 Assessment 6: St. Patrick s Day pp. 99-100 pp. 18-19 Assessment 6: Untitled pp. 101-102 pp. 20-21
Teacher s Student Manual Page Assessment 7: Lighthouses p. 109 p. 22 Assessment 7: Scarecrows pp. 110-112 pp. 23-25 Assessment 8: Fall Cleanup pp. 131-132 pp. 26-27 Assessment 8: Spring Blooms from Autumn Bulbs pp. 133-134 pp. 28-29 Assessment 8: A Haunted House pp. 135-137 pp. 30-32 Assessment 9: Getting Home for Thanksgiving pp. 148-150 pp. 33-35 Assessment 9: Friendly Letter pp. 151-155 pp. 36-40 Assessment 9: Gingerbread Fun pp. 156-159 pp. 41-44 Assessment 10: New Year s Resolutions! pp. 180-183 pp. 45-48 Assessment 10: Reverend Martin Luther King, Jr. pp. 184-188 pp. 49-53 Assessment 10: Prairie Dogs pp. 189-191 pp. 54-56 Assessment 10: Field Day pp. 192-195 pp. 57-60 Assessment 11: Sledding pp. 208-211 pp. 61-64 Assessment 11: Japanese Art pp. 212-215 pp. 65-68 Assessment 11: Rainforests pp. 216-218 pp. 69-71 Assessment 11: Ireland pp. 219-222 pp. 72-75
Assessment 1: Skill: Revising Incomplete Sentences Read this: Autumn Autumn is an interesting season. Leaves change to red and gold. Cooler weather. Animals prepare for winter. The days become shorter. During the fall on Halloween. What is this all about? Now, read it, one line at a time. Look for lines that are NOT complete sentences. (1) Autumn is an interesting season. (2) Leaves change to red and gold.(3) Cooler weather. (4) Animals prepare for winter. (5) The days become shorter. (6) During the fall on Halloween. Answer the questions below. Look back at each line to help answer the questions. 1. Sentence 3 is not a complete sentence. Which one of these is the correct way to rewrite it? a.) Cooler weather in autumn. b.) I like cooler weather. c.) In autumn the weather is cooler. d.) Cooler weather then. 2. Sentence 6 is not a complete sentence. Which one of these is the correct way to rewrite it? f.) During the fall, we have fun on Halloween. g.) During the fall, on Halloween is nice. h.) During the fall, on Halloween in autumn. j.) I like during the fall on Halloween 1
Assessment 1: Skill: Revising Incomplete Sentences Read this: Apple Picking Apple picking is a great way to spend an autumn afternoon. Take tractor ride to orchard fun. Bring basket. There are lots of apples to pick. Some are good to eat right off the tree. Others are baking. What is this all about? Now, read it, one line at a time. Look for lines that are NOT complete sentences. (1) Apple picking is a great way to spend an autumn afternoon. (2) Take tractor ride to orchard fun. (3) Bring basket. (4) There are lots of apples to pick. (5) Some are good to eat right off the tree. (6) Other apples. Answer the questions below. Look back at each line to help answer the questions. 1. Sentence 2 is poorly written. Which one of these is the correct way to rewrite it? a.) tractor ride into the orchard. b.) Tractor riding to the orchard. c.) It is fun to take a tractor ride into the orchard. d.) To the orchard take a tractor. 2. Sentence 3 is not a complete sentence. Which one of these is the correct way to rewrite it? f.) Bring you a basket. g.) Bring a basket with you. h.) You bring basket. j.) No change needed. 3. Sentence 6 is not a complete sentence. Which one of these is the correct way to rewrite it? a.) Others used baking. b.) Other apples are baking. c.) Other apples are for bake. d.) Other apples are used for baking. 2
Assessment 2: Skills: Capitalizing Beginning of a Sentence, End Punctuation, Helping/Linking words, Subject/Verb Agreement Read this: Election Day The first Tuesday of November are Election Day. people go to vote for their leaders. They vote at schools or at the town hall. Most towns voting booths. The candidate with the most votes be the winner. What is this all about? (1) The first Tuesday of November are Election Day. (2) people go to vote for their leaders. (3) They vote at schools or at the town hall. (4) Most towns voting booths. (5) The candidate with the most votes be the winner. 1. Sentence 1 should read: a.) The first Tuesday of November an Election Day. b.) The first Tuesday of November is Election Day. c.) The first Tuesday of November be Election Day. d.) the first Tuesday of November is Election Day 2. Sentence 2 should read: f.) people go to vote for their Leaders. g.) People is go vote for their leaders. h.) People go to vote for their leaders. j.) People go to vote for they re leaders. 3. Sentence 4 should read: a.) Most towns have voting booths. b.) Most towns has voting booths. c.) Most towns got voting booths. d.) No change needed. 4. Sentence 5 should read: f.) the candidate with the most votes is the winner. g.) The candidate with the most votes are the winner. h.) The candidate with the most votes is the winner. j.) No change needed. 3
Assessment 2: Skills: Capitalizing Beginning of a Sentence, End Punctuation, Helping/Linking words, Subject/Verb Agreement. Read this: Pilgrims When we think of Pilgrims we think of Thanksgiving. In the year 1620 a group of Pilgrims from England crossed the sea. they come on a ship called the Mayflower and landed in Plymouth. Life be hard for the Pilgrims. Many of them got sick. Some died. At the end of their first year they had a feast. they gave thanks for their New home. This was the first Thanksgiving. What was the author s purpose in writing this paragraph? 1) When we think of Pilgrims we think of Thanksgiving. (2) In the year 1620 a group of Pilgrims from England crossed the sea. (3) they come on a ship called the Mayflower and landed in Plymouth. (4) Life be hard for the Pilgrims. (5) Many of them got sick. (6) Some died. (7) At the end of their first year they had a feast. (8) they gave thanks for their New home? (9) This was the first Thanksgiving. 1. Sentence 3 should read: a.) They came on a ship called the Mayflower and landed in Plymouth. b.) They came on a ship called the mayflower and landed in plymouth. c.) They come on a ship called the Mayflower and landed in Plymouth. d.) No change needed. 2. Sentence 4 should read: f.) Life is hard for the Pilgrims. g.) Life is being hard for the Pilgrims. h.) Life was hard for the Pilgrims. j.) life be hard for the Pilgrims 3. Sentence 8 should read: a.) They gave thanks for their new home. b.) They gave thanks for their new home? c.) They gave thanks for their new Home. d.) they gave thanks for their new home. 4
Assessment 3: Skills: End Punctuation, Capitalization, Subject/Verb Agreement Read this: Kwanzaa On december 26, african american people begin celebrating a seven day festival known as kwanzaa. Kwanzaa was created by African American leader maulana karenga in 1966 to teach all African Americans about their African history. as part of the tradition, there is seven symbols for Kwanzaa. Each symbol has a different Meaning. On December 31, there is a special meal. Families and friends bring food to share. They celebrate with African music and dancing. Children open gifts. Everyone shouts Harambee! during the Kwanzaa celebration. Harambee means let s all pull together. What is this piece all about? (1) On december 26, african american people begin celebrating a seven day festival known as kwanzaa. (2) Kwanzaa was created by African American leader maulana karenga in 1966 to teach all African Americans about their African history. (3) as part of the tradition, there is seven symbols for Kwanzaa. (4) Each symbol has a different Meaning. (5) On December 31, there is a special meal. (6) Families and friends bring food to share. (7) They celebrate with African music and dancing. (8) Children open gifts. (9) Everyone shouts Harambee! during the Kwanzaa celebration. (10) Harambee means let s all pull together. 1. Sentence 1 should read: a.) On December 26, african american people begin celebrating a seven day festival known as kwanzaa. b.) On december 26, African American people begin celebrating a seven day festival known as Kwanzaa. c.) On December 26, African American people begin celebrating a seven day festival known as Kwanzaa. d.) No change needed. 2. Sentence 2 should read: f.) Kwanzaa was created by African American leader maulana karenga in 1966 to teach all African Americans about their african history. g.) Kwanzaa was created by African American leader Maulana Karenga in 1966 to teach all African Americans about their African history. h.) kwanzaa was created by African American leader Maulana Karenga in 1966 to teach all African Americans about their African history. j.) No change needed. 5
3. Sentence 3 should read: a.) As part of the tradition, there is seven symbols for Kwanzaa. b.) As part of the tradition, there is seven symbols for kwanzaa. c.) As part of the tradition, there are seven symbols for Kwanzaa. d.) No change needed. 4. Sentence 4 should read: f.) Each symbol has a different meaning. g.) Each symbol has a Different Meaning. h.) each symbol has a different Meaning. j.) No change needed. 6
Assessment 3: Skills: Capitalizing Beginning of a Sentence, End Punctuation, Helping/Linking Words, Subject/Verb Agreement Read this: Cranberries Have you ever had a cranberry. This popular fruit growed on vines in wet areas called bogs. Growers flood the bogs with water to harvest the cranberries. Then, a huge machine that looks like a giant egg beater stirs up the water. The ripe cranberries fall off the vine and float to the top. Growers then wade through the water and gather the cranberries. cranberries harvested this way be used in juice and sauces. What is this all about? (1) have you ever had a cranberry. (2) This popular fruit growed on vines in wet areas called bogs. (3) Growers flood the bogs with water to harvest the cranberries. (4) Then, a huge machine that looks like a giant egg beater stirs up the water. (5) The ripe cranberries fall off the vine and float to the top. (6) Growers then wade through the water and gather the cranberries. (7) cranberries harvested this way be used in juice and sauces. 1. Sentence 1 should read: a.) have you ever had a cranberry? b.) Have you ever had a cranberry. c.) Have you ever had a cranberry? d.) Have you ever had a cranberry! 2. Sentence 2 is poorly written. Which of these is the CORRECT way to rewrite it? f.) This popular fruit grown on vines in wet areas called bogs. g.) This popular fruit grows on vines in wet areas called bogs. h.) This popular fruit be growed on vines in wet areas called bogs. j.) This popular fruit is growed on vines in wet areas called bogs. 3. Sentence 7 is poorly written. Which of these is the CORRECT way to rewrite it? a.) Cranberries harvest this way be used in juice and sauces. b.) cranberries harvested this way are used in juice and sauces. c.) Cranberries harvested this way is used in juice and sauces. d.) Cranberries harvested this way are used in juice and sauces. 7
Assessment 4: Skills: End Punctuation, Capitalization, Helping/Linking words, Subject/Verb Agreement, Using Commas in a List Read this: Recycled Trees Each year over 33 million families use evergreen trees to decorate their homes at Christmas. After the holiday, the trees is recycled. Many communities have a Christmas tree pickup. The trees that is collected are used as mulch for gardens parks or in animal stalls. In states along the gulf of mexico, workers sink the old Christmas trees to prevent sand and soil from washing away marshes beaches and riverbanks. Many communities sink the trees into ponds where they serve as feeding spots for fish. If you were summarizing this, what would you say it is all about? (1) Each year over 33 million families use evergreen trees to decorate their homes at Christmas. (2) After the holiday, the trees is recycled. (3) Many communities have a Christmas tree pickup. (4) The trees that is collected are used as mulch for gardens parks or in animal stalls. (5) In states along the gulf of mexico, workers sink the old Christmas trees to prevent sand and soil from washing away marshes beaches and riverbanks. (6) Many communities sink the trees into ponds where they serve as feeding spots for fish. 1. Sentence 2 should read: a.) After the holiday, the trees are recycled. b.) After the Holiday, the trees is recycled. c.) After the holiday, the trees be recycled. d.) No change needed. 2. Sentence 4 should read: f.) The trees that is collected are used as mulch for gardens, parks, or in animal, stalls. g.) The trees that are collected are used as mulch for gardens, parks, or in animal stalls. h.) The trees that is collected are used as mulch for, gardens parks, or in animal stalls. j.) No change needed. 3. Sentence 5 should read: a.) In states along the gulf of mexico, workers sink the old Christmas trees to prevent sand, and soil, from washing away marshes beaches and riverbanks. b.) In states along the Gulf of Mexico, workers sink the old Christmas trees to prevent sand and soil from washing away marshes, beaches, and riverbanks. c.) In states along the Gulf of Mexico, workers sink the old Christmas trees to prevent sand and soil from washing away marshes beaches and riverbanks. d.) No change needed. 8
Assessment 4: Skills: End Punctuation, Capitalization, Helping/Linking words, Subject/Verb Agreement, Using Commas in a List Read this: A New Year The old year is over and the new year begins! it is time for a celebration! People plan parties on new year s eve. They celebrate with food music dancing and balloons. At most parties people wear party hats or crowns. As midnight comes, there are a countdown. At the stroke of twelve, they use noisemakers confetti and streamers to welcome the new year. Shouts of Happy New Year! be heard for miles around. As the new year begins, people make resolutions about how they will act in the coming year. What is this piece of writing all about? What did the author mean by the phrase At the stroke of twelve? (1) The old year is over and the new year begins! (2) it is time for a celebration! (3) People plan parties on new year s eve. (4) They celebrate with food music dancing and balloons. (5) At most parties people wear party hats or crowns. (6) As midnight comes, there are a countdown. (7) At the stroke of twelve, they use noisemakers confetti and streamers to welcome the new year. (8) Shouts of Happy New Year! be heard for miles around. (9) As the new year begins, people make resolutions about how they will act in the coming year. 1. Sentence 2 should read: a.) It is time for a celebration? b.) It is time for a celebration c.) It is time for a celebration! d.) No change needed. 2. Sentence 3 should read: f.) People plan Parties on new year s eve. g.) people plans parties on new year s eve. h.) People plan parties on New Year s Eve. j.) No change needed. 3. Sentence 4 should read: a.) They celebrate with food, music, dancing, and balloons. b.) They celebrates with food, music, dancing, and, balloons. c.) They celebrate with, food, music, dancing, and, balloons. d.) No change needed. 9
4. Sentence 6 should read: f.) As midnight comes there are a countdown? g.) As midnight comes, there is a countdown. h.) As midnight come, there is a countdown. j.) As midnights come there is a countdown. 5. Sentence 7 should read: a.) At the stroke of twelve, they using noisemakers, confetti, and streamers to welcome the new year. b.) At the stroke of twelve, them are using noisemakers, confetti, and streamers to welcome the new year. c.) At the stroke of twelve, they use noisemakers, confetti, and streamers to welcome the new year. d.) No change needed. 6. Sentence 8 should read: f.) Shouts of Happy New Year! be heard for miles around? g.) Shouts of Happy New Year! can be heard for miles around. h.) Shouts of Happy New Year! be hearing for miles around. j.) shouts of Happy New Year! be heard for miles around. 10
Assessment 4: Skills: End Punctuation, Helping/Linking Words, Subject/Verb Agreement, Using Commas in a List Read this: Winter Sports Many people enjoy winter sports. after a good snowfall you can grab your sled and head for the hills? Other people like to ice skate. If there is a mountain nearby, you might want to ski or snowboard. You can also go ice fishing on frozen lakes.in some places people go hiking. They wear snowshoes to help them navigate the terrain. Those who like action play hockey. Sledding skating skiing snowboarding ice fishing hiking and hockey are exciting cold weather activities. What are your favorite winter sport. If you were summarizing this, what would you say it is all about? (1) Many people enjoy winter sports. (2) after a good snowfall you can grab your sled and head for the hills? (3) Other people like to ice skate. (4) If there is a mountain nearby, you might want to ski or snowboard. (5) You can also go ice fishing on frozen lakes. (6) In some places people go hiking. (7) They wear snowshoes to help them navigate the terrain. (8) Those who like action play hockey. (9) Sledding skating skiing snowboarding ice fishing hiking and hockey are exciting cold weather activities. (10) What are your favorite winter sport. 1. Sentence 2 should read: a.) After a good snowfall, you can grab your sled and head for the hills b.) After a good snowfall, you can grab your sled and head for the hills? c.) After a good snowfall, you can grab your sled and head for the hills! d.) No change is needed. 2. Sentence 9 should read: f.) Sledding, skating, skiing, snowboarding, ice fishing, hiking, and hockey are exciting cold weather activities. g.) Sledding, skating, skiing, snowboarding, ice, fishing, hiking, and hockey is exciting cold weather activities. h.) Sledding, skating, skiing, snowboarding, ice fishing, hiking, and hockey is exciting cold weather activities. j.) No change is needed. 11
Assessment 5: Skills: Capitalization, Commas in a List, Extraneous Details, Sentence Combining Read this: The Groundhog The groundhog is also called the woodchuck. They are members of the squirrel family. This large rodent is found in north america, Europe, and Asia. They have flat noses short legs short ears and short bushy tails. The woodchuck eat plants and enjoy raiding farmer s gardens and eating their crops. There are deer in my yard. These animals hibernate during the winter in burrows under the ground. The legend of the groundhog is thought to have come from Germany and Great Britain. According to the legend. On February 2nd people wake up the groundhog and chase him out of his burrow. If he sees his shadow people think he gets frightened and runs back to his burrow. This is supposed to mean that there will be six more weeks of winter. If he doesn t see his shadow, people think he will stay outside of his burrow. This is supposed to mean that we will have an early spring and that spring will come early. Is this a narrative story or expository piece? What is the author s purpose? (1) The groundhog is also called the woodchuck. (2) They are members of the squirrel family. (3) This large rodent is found in north america, Europe, and Asia. (4) They have flat noses short legs short ears and short bushy tails. (5) The woodchuck eat plants and enjoy raiding farmer s gardens and eating their crops. (6) There are deer in my yard. (7) These animals hibernate during the winter in burrows under the ground.(8) The legend of the groundhog is thought to have come from Germany and Great Britain. (9) According to the legend. (10) On February 2nd of each year people wake up the groundhog and chase him out of his burrow. (11) If he sees his shadow people think he gets frightened and runs back to his burrow. (12) This is supposed to mean that there will be six more weeks of winter. (13) If he doesn t see his shadow, people think he will stay outside of his burrow. (14) This is supposed to mean that we will have an early spring and that spring will come early. 1. The author wrote this passage to give you information about: a.) groundhogs and winter holidays b.) groundhogs and the damage they do to farmer s crop c.) animals that are related to squirrels d.) groundhogs and the legend of Groundhog Day 12
2. Sentence 3 is not correct. Which sentence is correct? f.) This large Rodent is found in north america, europe, and asia. g.) This large rodent is found in North America, Europe, and Asia. h.) This large rodent is found in north America, Europe, and Asia. j.) This large rodent is found in north america, europe, and asia. 3. Sentence 4 needs help with punctuation. The correct way to express this idea is: a.) They have flat noses short, legs short ears, and short bushy tails. b.) They have, flat noses, short legs short ears and short bushy tails. c.) They have flat noses, short legs, short ears, and short bushy tails. d.) They have flat, noses, short, legs, short, ears, and short, bushy tails. 4. Which sentence does NOT belong in this passage: f.) Sentence 4 g.) Sentence 8 h.) Sentence 6 j.) Sentence 10 5. What is the best way to combine sentences 9 and 10: a.) according to the legend on February 2nd people wake up the groundhog and chase him out of his burrow. b.) According to the legend, on February 2nd people wake up the groundhog and chase him out of his burrow. c.) according to the legend on February 2nd of each, year people wake up the groundhog and chase him out of his burrow. d.) On February 2nd of each year people wake up the Groundhog and chase him out of his burrow according to the legend. 13
Assessment 5: Skills: Capitalization, Commas in a List, Sentence Fragments, Sentence Combining Read this: February 14th (1) Each year on february 14, millions of people give and receive Valentines. (2) These small tokens of love and friendship come in many forms. (3) Some people send cards to their friends or sweethearts. (4) These cards can be funny sweet and loving fancy or even homemade. (5) Usually they are decorated in the traditional Valentine colors. (6) Of red and white with hearts and lacy designs. (7) In addition to cards, people may send red heart shaped boxes filled with chocolate candy surprises. (8) Still there are those who send flowers to their special valentine. (9) The most popular flower on Valentine s day. (10) Is the rose. (11) Red roses are usually symbolize love and yellow roses are for friendship. (12) Whether you receive a card candy or flowers it is always exciting for you to receive a valentine sent to you from a friend or loved one. What is this piece of writing all about? What was the author s purpose? What does the author mean by these small tokens? 1. A good title for this is: a.) The History of Greeting Cards b.) Valentine s Day c.) February Holidays d.) Valentine Cards 2. Sentence 1 should read: f.) Each year on February 14, millions of people give and receive Valentines. g.) Each year on february 14, millions of people give and receive valentines. h.) Each year on February 14, millions of people give and receive valentines. j.) No change needed. 14
3. How can you BEST put sentences 5 and 6 together into one sentence without changing the meaning? a.) Traditionally they are decorated in usually Valentine colors of red and white with hearts and lacy designs. b.) Usually they are decorated with hearts and lacy designs in the traditional valentine colors of red and white. c.) Decorated usually in Valentine colors traditionally of red white hearts, and lacy designs. d.) Usually they are decorated in the traditional Valentine colors of red and white with hearts, and lacy designs. 4. Lines 9 and 10 are incomplete sentences: Combine them to read: f.) The most popular flower on Valentine s day, is the rose. g.) The most popular flower on Valentine s Day is the Rose. h.) The most popular flower on Valentine s Day is the rose. j.) The most popular flower on valentine s day is the rose. 5. Sentence 12 is hard to read. It is better expressed as: a.) Whether you receive a card, candy, or flowers sent to you, it is always exciting to receive a Valentine sent from a friend or loved one. b.) Whether you receive a card, candy, or flowers, it is always exciting to receive a valentine sent from a friend or loved one. c.) It is always exciting to receive a Valentine card, candy, or flowers from a friend or loved one. d.) Whether you receive a card, candy, or flowers. It is always exciting to receive a Valentine sent from a friend or loved one. 15
Assessment 6: Skill: Capitalization, Commas in a List, Subject/Verb Agreement, Chronological Order, Sentence Fragments, Sentence Combining Read this: 100 Days of School (1) As the school days pass. (2) You cross each day off your calendar. (3) The seasons change from Summer to Fall, then from Fall to Winter. (4) Before you know it, you have crossed off one hundred days! (5) You point to each x and count them up. (6) It be time to celebrate hundreds day! (7) Some classrooms do projects. (8) Each student collects one hundred items. (9) Someone might display one hundred noodles. (10) Glued in a pattern on poster board. (11) Another student might put one hundred marbles in a jar. (12) The class might estimate how much space one hundred elephants would fill! (13) The best thing to count on Hundred s Day is candy! (14) Everyone enjoys one hundred m and m s! What was the author s purpose? 1. Line 1 is not a sentence. Combine it with sentence 2. The best combination is: a.) As the school days pass and you cross each day off your calendar. b.) The schools days pass and as you cross each day off your calendar. c.) As the school days pass, you cross each day off your calendar. d.) The schools days pass you cross each day off your calendar. 2. Sentence 3 should read: f.) The Seasons change from Summer to Fall, then from Fall to Winter. g.) The seasons change from Summer to Winter, then from Winter to Fall. h.) The seasons change from summer to fall, then from fall to winter. j.) The Seasons change from summer to fall, then from fall to winter. 3. Sentence 5 is out of order. It belongs: a.) Before sentence 4. b.) After sentence 6. c.) Before sentence 2. d.) At the very end. 16
4. Sentence 6 should read: f.) It is time to celebrate hundred s day! g.) It is time to celebrate Hundred s Day! h.) It be time to celebrating Hundred s day! j.) It is time to celebrate Hundred s day! 5. Combine lines 9 and 10. The best combination would be: a.) Someone might display one hundred noodles but glued in a pattern on poster board. b.) Someone might display one hundred noodles and be glued in a pattern on poster board. c.) Someone might display one hundred noodles glued in a pattern on poster board. d.) Someone might displayed one hundred noodles glued in a pattern on poster board. 6. Sentence 14 should read: f.) Everyones enjoy one hundred m and m s! g.) Everyone enjoying one hundred m and m s! h.) Everyones enjoys one hundred m and m s! j.) Everyone enjoys one hundred M and M s! 17
Assessment 6: Skills: Capitalization, Extraneous Details, Sentence Fragments, Sentence Combining, Run on Sentences, On and Ons Read this: St. Patrick s Day (1) On March seventeenth many people celebrate st. patrick s day! (2) St. Patrick was a real person who lived in ireland long ago. (3) Legend tells that he frightened the snakes out of Ireland. (4) On St. Patrick s Day people wear green they even eat green bagels. (5) Green is my favorite color. (6) On this special day many towns and cities have parades. (7) The parades have Irish music and dancing. (8) Leprechaun stories about rainbows and pots of gold. (9) You don t have to be irish to enjoy a St. Patrick s day meal of corned beef and cabbage. 1. Edit sentence 1. It should read: a.) On march seventeenth many people celebrate st. patrick s day! b.) On March Seventeenth many people celebrate st. patrick s day! c.) On March seventeenth, many people celebrate St. Patrick s Day! d.) No change needed. 2. Edit sentence 2. It should read: f.) St. patrick was a real person who lived in ireland long ago. g.) St. Patrick was a real person who lived in Ireland long ago. h.) St. patrick was a real person who lived in Ireland long ago. j.) No change needed. 3. Sentence 4 is a run-on. Revise it. It would best read: a.) On St. Patrick s Day people wear green. They even eat green bagels. b.) On St. Patrick s Day. People wear green they even eat green bagels. c.) On St. Patrick s Day people wear green they even eat. Green bagels. d.) On St. Patrick s Day people wear green. On St. Patricks Day they even eat green bagels. 4. Combine sentence 6 and sentence 7. The best combination would be: f.) On this special day many towns and cities have parades and the parades have Irish music and dancing. g.) On this special day many towns and cities have Irish music and dancing in their parades. h.) On this special day, many towns and cities have parades with Irish music and dancing. j.) On this special day many towns and cities have parades Irish music and dancing. 18
5. Line 8 is not a complete sentence. Revise it. It should read: a.) People tell leprechaun stories about rainbows and pots of gold. b.) Leprechaun stories about rainbows and pots of gold people tell. c.) Leprechaun stories about rainbows are told and about pots of gold. d.) Leprechaun stories people tell about rainbows and pots of gold. 6. Edit sentence 9. It should read: f.) You don t have to be irish to enjoy a st. patrick s day meal of corned beef and cabbage. g.) You don t have to be Irish to enjoy a St. patrick s day meal of corned beef and cabbage. h.) You don t have to be Irish to enjoy a st. Patrick s day meal of corned beef and cabbage. j.) You don t have to be Irish to enjoy a St. Patrick s Day meal of corned beef and cabbage. 7. There is a sentence in this paragraph that doesn t belong. The author should leave out: a.) Sentence 3 b.) Sentence 5 c.) Sentence 9 d.) Sentence 6 19
Assessment 6 Skills: Capitalization, On and On, Sentence Fragments, Chronological Order Read this: (Title) (1) So, if you are ever in Mexico on the fifth of May be prepared for a celebration! (2) Excited Parade-goers dressed in colorful clothes line the streets. (3) The beat of music fills the air and there is plenty of dancing and singing and delicious smells of Mexican food tempt party-goers and the crack of breaking piñatas is heard for blocks. (4) It must be Mexico s national holiday, Cinco de Mayo! (5) Spanish for the fifth of May. (6) cinco de Mayo celebrates the mexican victory over the french army. (7) The battle lasted for one day and the Mexicans emerged victorious over the much larger French Army. 1. What is a good title for this passage? a.) Great parades b.) The Customs of Mexico c.) Cinco de Mayo d.) How Mexico Beat France 2. Sentence 1 is out of order. It should be: f.) After sentence 2. g.) After sentence 6. h.) Before sentence 7. j.) At the very end. 3. Sentence 2 is not correct. The best choice is: a.) Excited Parade-goers dressed in colorful clothes line the Streets. b.) Excited parade-goers dressed in colorful clothes line the streets. c.) Excited Parade-Goers dressed in colorful clothes line the streets. d.) excited Parade-goers dressed in colorful clothes line the streets. 20
(1) So, if you are ever in Mexico on the fifth of May be prepared for a celebration! (2) Excited Parade-goers dressed in colorful clothes line the streets. (3) The beat of music fills the air and there is plenty of dancing and singing and delicious smells of Mexican food tempt party-goers and the crack of breaking piñatas is heard for blocks. (4) It must be Mexico s national holiday, Cinco de Mayo! (5) Spanish for the fifth of May. (6) cinco de Mayo celebrates the mexican victory over the french army. (7) The battle lasted for one day and the Mexicans emerged victorious over the much larger French Army. 4. Sentence 3 goes on and on. Which is the best way to rewrite it? f.) The beat of music fills the air. And there is plenty of dancing and singing. And delicious smells of Mexican food tempt party-goers. And the crack of breaking piñatas is heard for blocks. g.) The beat of music fills the air. There is plenty of dancing and singing. Delicious smells of Mexican food tempt party-goers as the crack of breaking piñatas is heard for blocks. h.) The beat of music fills the air, and there is plenty of dancing, and singing, and delicious smells of Mexican food tempt party-goers, and the crack of breaking piñatas is heard for blocks. j.) The beat of music fills the air. There is plenty of dancing and singing and delicious smells of Mexican food tempt party-goers and the crack of breaking piñatas is heard for blocks. 5. Which sentence is not complete? a.) Sentence 4 b.) Sentence 5 c.) Sentence 6 d.) Sentence 7 6. Sentence 6 is not correct. It should read: f.) Cinco de Mayo celebrates the mexican victory over the french army. g.) Cinco de Mayo celebrates the Mexican victory over the french army. h.) Cinco de Mayo celebrates the Mexican victory over the French army. j.) Cinco de Mayo celebrates the Mexican victory over the French Army. 21
Assessment 7 Skills: Commas in a List, Sentence Fragments, Sentence Combining, Run on Sentences, On and Ons Read this: Lighthouses (1) Lighthouses are towers that stand near water. (2) During the daylight lighthouses serve as landmarks for sailors. (3) At night lighthouses provide light for sailors. (4) So that ships won t crash on the rocky shore. (5) Many lighthouses have strong lamps and many lighthouses have loud foghorns and many lighthouses use radio equipment to warn ships of danger. (6) The first lighthouse was probably built in the 7th century B.C. (7) These early lighthouses were stone towers with a fire set on top. (8) Nowadays high-powered electrical lights are used. (9) Nowadays the high-powered electrical lights are rotating and blinking. (10) There is an ice cream shop near the Cape Neddick Lighthouse in Maine. This paragraph gives information about. Which sentence does not belong in this paragraph?. 1. Sentence 4 is not a complete sentence. Combine it with sentence 3. The best combination is: a.) At night lighthouses provide light for sailors so that ships won t crash on the rocky shore at night. b.) At night lighthouses provide light for sailors so that at night ships won t crash on the rocky shore. c.) At night lighthouses provide light for sailors so that ships won t crash on the rocky shore. d.) At night lighthouses provide light for sailors and ships won t crash on the rocky shore. 2. Sentence 5 runs on and on. Revise it. It should read: f.) Many lighthouses have strong lamps, and loud foghorns, and use radio equipment to warn ships of danger. g.) Many lighthouses have strong lamps, loud foghorns, and radio equipment to warn ships of danger. h.) Many lighthouses have strong lamps. Many lighthouses have loud foghorns. Many lighthouses use radio equipment to warn ships of danger. j.) Many lighthouses have strong lamps and loud foghorns. Many lighthouses use radio equipment to warn ships of danger. 3. Sentence 8 and sentence 9 can be combined. The best combination is: a.) Nowadays high-powered electrical lights that are rotating and blinking are used. b.) Nowadays high-powered electrical lights are used that are rotating and blinking. c.) Nowadays high-powered electrical lights are used and nowadays they rotate and blink. d.) Nowadays high-powered electrical lights that rotate and blink are used. 22
Assessment 7 Skills: Commas in a List, Subject/Verb Agreement, Extraneous Details, Sentence Fragments, Sentence Combining, Run on Sentences, On and Ons, Use of a/an Read this: Scarecrows (1) For thousands of years farmers all over the world has used scarecrows in their fields. (2) Birds and other pests can destroy a entire field of crops. (3) Scarecrows are one way farmers keep pests out of their fields. (4) Scarecrows have also been called jack-of-straws scarebirds tattybogles or shoy-hoys. (5) We think of scarecrows as straw-stuffed dummies, but these are only one kind of scarecrow. (6) Farmers also use noisemakers smelly fires shiny metal objects and dead birds to frighten away garden pests. (7) In the olden days farmers sometimes used children to scare away birds. (8) In the olden days farmers also used elderly people to scare away birds. (9) These human scarecrows used clappers to make loud noises and threw stones and flapped their arms and also shouted at the birds to scare them off. (10) I visited a farm once. (11) Nowadays modern farmers. (12) Sometimes use high-tech, selfinflating scarecrows that seem to jump up out of nowhere. (13) What works best are large plastic owls or hawk shaped kites according to some farmers. 1. What is this paragraph all about? a.) how scarecrows help grow corn b.) how scarecrows protect the birds c.) how to make a scarecrow d.) the many kinds of scarecrows that are used to protect crops 2. Sentence 1 should be edited. It should read: f.) For thousands of years, Farmers all over the world has used scarecrows in their fields. g.) For thousands of years, farmers all over the world have used scarecrows in their fields. h.) For thousands of years, farmers all over the world has using scarecrows in their fields. j.) For thousands of years, farmers all over the world be using scarecrows in their fields. 3. Edit sentence 2. It should read: a.) Birds and other pests can destroying a entire field of crops. b.) Birds and other pests can destroy an entire field of crops. c.) Birds an other pests can destroy a entire field of crops. d.) No change needed. 23
(1) For thousands of years farmers all over the world has used scarecrows in their fields. (2) Birds and other pests can destroy a entire field of crops. (3) Scarecrows are one way farmers keep pests out of their fields. (4) Scarecrows have also been called jack-of-straws scarebirds tattybogles or shoy-hoys. (5) We think of scarecrows as straw-stuffed dummies, but these are only one kind of scarecrow. (6) Farmers also use noisemakers smelly fires shiny metal objects and dead birds to frighten away garden pests. (7) In the olden days farmers sometimes used children to scare away birds. (8) In the olden days farmers also used elderly people to scare away birds. (9) These human scarecrows used clappers to make loud noises and threw stones and flapped their arms and also shouted at the birds to scare them off. (10) I visited a farm once. (11) Nowadays modern farmers. (12) Sometimes use high-tech, selfinflating scarecrows that seem to jump up out of nowhere. (13) What works best are large plastic owls or hawk shaped kites according to some farmers. 4. Help the author edit sentence 4. It should read: f.) Scarecrows has also been called jack-of-straws scarebirds tattybogles or shoy-hoys. g.) Scarecrows have also be called jack-of-straws scarebirds tattybogles or shoy-hoys. h.) Scarecrows have also been called jack-of-straws scarebirds tattybogles or shoy-hoys. j.) Scarecrows have also been called jack-of-straws, scarebirds, tattybogles, or shoy-hoys. 5. Help the author edit sentence 6. It should read: a.) Farmers also use noisemakers, smelly fires, shiny metal objects, and dead birds to frighten away garden pests. b.) Farmers also use noisemakers, smelly, fires, shiny, metal, objects, and dead, birds to frighten away garden pests. c.) Farmers also use noisemakers smelly, fires shiny metal, objects and, dead birds to frighten away garden pests. d.) No change needed. 6. Revise sentences 7 and 8. The BEST way to write this would be: f.) In the olden days farmers sometimes used children to scare away birds and also used elderly people to scare away birds. g.) In the olden days farmers sometimes used children to scare away birds and in the olden days farmers also used elderly people to scare away birds. h.) In the olden days farmers sometimes used children to scare away birds, also elderly people. j.) In the olden days, farmers sometimes used children and elderly people to scare away birds. 24
7. Revise sentence 9. The BEST way to write these ideas would be: a.) These human scarecrows used clappers to make loud noises, threw stones, flapped their arms, and also shouted at the birds to scare them off. b.) These human scarecrows used clappers. To make loud noises, threw stones, flapped their arms, and also shouted at the birds to scare them off. c.) These human scarecrows used clappers to make loud noises. These human scarecrows also threw stones. These human scarecrows flapped their arms. These human scarecrows shouted at birds to scare them off. d.) No change needed. 8. Look at sentences 11 and 12. How should these be revised? f.) Nowadays modern farmers sometimes use high-tech, self-inflating scarecrows. That seem to jump up out of nowhere. g.) Nowadays modern farmers sometimes use high-tech. Self-inflating scarecrows that seem to jump up out of nowhere. h.) Nowadays modern farmers sometimes use high-tech, self-inflating scarecrows that seem to jump up. Out of nowhere. j.) Nowadays modern farmers sometimes use high-tech, self-inflating scarecrows that seem to jump up out of nowhere. 9. Sentence 13 is awkward. It should be revised like this: a.) What work best are large plastic owls, or hawk-shaped kites, according to some farmers. b.) According to some farmers, what works best are large plastic owls or hawk-shaped kites. c.) What works best, according to some farmers, is large plastic owls, or hawk-shaped kites accordingly. d.) According to some farmers large plastic owls, or hawk-shaped kites work best for farmers. 10. Which sentence does NOT belong in this piece? f.) Sentence 8 g.) Sentence 10 h.) Sentence 5 j.) Sentence 3 25
Assessment 8 Skills: Capitalization, Punctuation, Sentence Fragments, Usage, Homophones An editor is someone who reads and thinks about what makes the writing effective and clear. She or he will read an entire piece of writing from start to finish, then go back and read each sentence alone. Sentence by sentence, the editor checks to see if the words make sense, checks for correct capitalization and punctuation, accurate spelling, good sentence structure, and word choice. You be the editor. Read the paragraph carefully to find out what it s all about. Each sentence is numbered to help you focus on one sentence at a time. Then read the questions that follow. The questions will help you decide how to revise, sentence by sentence. Be sure to read all of the possible revisions before choosing the one that you think is best! Read this: Fall Cleanup (1) In many places autumn is a time of year for fall cleanup. (2) As the weather cools, leaves change color and begin to fall. (3) Covering lawns and sidewalks. (4) Fallen leaves can be a nuisance! (5) Their slippery when wet and can be dangerous. (6) Fallen leaves can also get moldy and cause allergies to act up. (7) So, Autumn is a time for taking out the rake and leaf blower. (8) The days become shorter so begin your cleanup early in the day! (9) be sure to have plenty of leaf bags on hand (10) Some kids enjoy jumping in big piles of leaves before they go in the bags? Answer the questions below. 1. Number 3 is not a complete sentence. (3) Covering lawns and sidewalks. It should read: a.) Cover lawns and sidewalks. b.) Covering lawns and sidewalks, the leaves do. c.) They cover the lawns and sidewalks. d.) they cover the lawns and sidewalks. 2. Read sentence 5 and decide how to rewrite it. (5) Their slippery when wet and can be dangerous. f.) They re slippery when wet and can be dangerous. g.) There slippery when wet and can be dangerous. h.) they can be slippery and dangerous when wet. j.) When wet their slippery and can be dangerous. 26
3. Choose the correct way to write the underlined part of sentence 7. (7) So, Autumn is a time for taking out the rake and leaf blower. a.) AUTUMN b.) autumn c.) autum d.) autunm 4. Choose the correct way to write sentence 9. (9) be sure to have plenty of leaf bags on hand f.) Be sure to have plenty of leaf bags on hand. g.) Be sure to have plenty of leaf bags on hand? h.) Be sure to have plenty of leaf bags, on hand. j.) Be sure to have plenty of leaf bags on hand 5. Choose the correct way to write sentence 10. (10) Some kids enjoy jumping in big piles of leaves before they go in the bags? a.) Some kids enjoy jumping in big piles of leaves before they go in the bags b.) Some kids enjoy jumping in Big piles of leaves before they go in the bags. c.) Some kids enjoy jumping in big piles of leaves, before the leaves are put in the bags. d.) Some kids enjoy jumping in big piles of leaves before the leaves are put in the bags. 27
Assessment 8 Skills: Capitalization, Punctuation, Pronouns, Sentence Fragments, Subject/Verb Agreement Read this: Spring Blooms from Autumn Bulbs (1) Have you ever seen flowers such as crocus daffodils or tulips? (2) We see these colorful blooms in shades from yellow to red, white to purple when the warm days of Spring arrive. (3) If you want to see these beautiful flowers in April and may you ll need to plant them in the Fall! (4) These, as well as numerous other flowers, begin as bulbs. (5) A bulb looks something like a small onion. (6) Bulbs is usually planted before the first frost. (7) Many bulbs are imported from holland. (8) At the garden center. (9) Carrie Ward is an expert gardener who has planted thousands of bulbs in Carrie Ward s yard. (10) Her yard is awash in color throughout the spring season. 1. Choose the correct way to write the underlined part of sentence 1. (1) Have you ever seen flowers such as crocuses daffodils or tulips? a.) Crocuses Daffodils or Tulips b.) Crocuses, Daffodils or Tulips c.) crocuses, daffodils or tulips d.) crocuses, daffodils, or tulips? 2. Choose the correct way to write the underlined part of sentence 2. (2) We see these colorful blooms in shades from yellow to red, white to purple when the warm days of Spring arrive. f.) when the Warm Days of Spring arrive. g.) when the warm days of spring arrive. h.) when the warm days of Spring arrive. j.) when the warm days of spring arrive? 3. Choose the correct way to write the underlined part of sentence 3. 28 (3) If you want to see these beautiful flowers in April and may, you ll need to plant them in the Fall! a.) April and May, you ll need to plant them in the fall! b.) april and may you ll need to plant them in the fall! c.) April and May you ll need to plant them in the Fall! d.) april and May you ll need to plant them in the fall!
4. Choose the correct way to write sentence 6. (6) Bulbs is usually planted before the first frost. f.) Bulbs is usually planted before the First Frost. g.) Bulbs are usually planted before the first frost. h.) Bulbs are usually planted before the First Frost. j.) Bulbs is usually planted before the first Frost. 5. Choose the correct way to write sentence 7. (7) Many bulbs are imported from holland. a.) Many bulbs is imported from holland. b.) Many bulbs be imported from holland. c.) Many bulbs is imported from Holland. d.) Many bulbs are imported from Holland. 6. Which of these is NOT a complete sentence? f.) A bulb looks something like a small onion. g.) At the garden center. h.) These, as well as numerous other flowers, begin as bulbs. j.) Her yard is awash in color throughout the spring season. 7. Choose the correct way to write the underlined part of sentence 9. (9) Carrie Ward is an expert gardener who has planted thousands of bulbs in Carrie Ward s yard. a.) in Carrie Wards yard. b.) in Carrie Wards yard. c.) in Carrie s yard. d.) in her yard. 29
Assessment 8 Skills: Capitalization, Punctuation, Pronouns, Sentence Fragments, Subject/Verb Agreement, Common and Proper Nouns, Usage Read this: A Haunted House (1) Every year when october rolls around jason begins decorating for halloween. (2) In his neighborhood his house is famous! (3) People drive by for a glimpse at his Halloween masterpiece. (4) He begins by crafting a giant spider web out of rope. (5) Jason strings Jason s spider web from the roof across the entire front lawn. (6) Their are a giant spider sitting on the web. (7) Styrofoam tombstones. (8) Life-sized ghost s goblins and witches stand guard. (9) Scary music. (10) Fog machines set the mood. (11) If you want to visit Jasons haunted house you ll need to go to Dallas, TX. (12) He lives on canon road. (13) If your brave try trick or treating at Jasons haunted house! 1. Choose the correct way to write sentence 1. (1) Every year when october rolls around jason begins decorating for halloween. a.) Every year when October rolls around, Jason begins decorating for Halloween. b.) Every year, when October rolls around, Jason begins decorating for halloween. c.) Every year when october rolls around Jason begins decorating for Halloween. d.) Every Year when October rolls around Jason begins decorating for Halloween? 2. Which is NOT a sentence? f.) In his neighborhood his house is famous! g.) People drive by for a glimpse at his Halloween masterpiece h.) Styrofoam tombstones. j.) He lives on canon road. 3. Choose the correct way to write sentence 5. (5) Jason strings Jason s spider web from the roof across the entire front lawn. a.) Jason strings Jasons spider web from the roof across the entire front lawn. b.) He strings Jasons spider web from the roof across the entire front lawn. c.) Jason strings Jason s spider web from the roof across the entire front lawn. d.) Jason strings his spider web from the roof across the entire front lawn. 30
4. Choose the correct way to write sentence 6. (6) Their are a giant spider sitting on the web. f.) There are a giant spider sitting on the web. g.) There is a giant spider sitting on the web. h.) They re is a giant spider sitting on the web. j.) They re are a giant spider sitting on the web. 5. Number 7 is not a sentence: (7) Styrofoam tombstones. It is best rewritten as follows: a.) Styrofoam tombstones be there. b.) He has styrofoam tombstones. c.) He sets up styrofoam tombstones next to the front walk. d.) Jason has styrofoam tombstones. 6. Choose the correct way to write sentence 8. (8) Life-sized ghost s goblins and witches stand guard. f.) Life-sized ghost s, goblin s and witch s stand guard. g.) Life-sized ghosts goblins and witches stand guard. h.) Life-sized ghostes, goblins and witches stand guard. j.) Life-sized ghosts, goblins, and witches stand guard. 7. Read numbers 9 and 10: (9) Scary music. (10) Fog machines set the mood. They can be best rewritten as: a.) There is scary music. Fog machines set the mood. b.) Scary music and fog machines set the mood. c.) Scary music sets the mood. Fog machines set the mood too. d.) There are scary music and fog machines to set the mood. 31