The Tomorrow Seeds. GOALS: I can learn from my mistakes. I can correct my introduction and one body paragraph to add points to my score. R.I.7.

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1 The Tomorrow Seeds GOALS: I can learn from my mistakes. I can correct my introduction and one body paragraph to add points to my score. R.I.7.1

2 Exemplary Introduction In The Tomorrow Seeds by Diane L. Burns, a Hopi Indian tribe was in conflict with the Spanish settlers and their priests, the Black Robes. The Spanish tried to force their ways upon the natives. One of the young Hopi men, Moki, experienced two visions about the future of his people, which closely represent what actually happened in history.

3 Exemplary Introduction Be sure to cite your source(s)! In The Tomorrow Seeds by Diane L. Burns, a Hopi Indian tribe was in conflict with the Spanish settlers and their priests, the Black Robes. The Spanish tried to force their ways upon the natives. One of the young Hopi men, Moki, experienced two visions about the future of his people, which closely represent what actually happened in history.

4 Exemplary Introduction Beginning: Introduce what the text is about! Briefly! In The Tomorrow Seeds by Diane L. Burns, a Hopi Indian tribe was in conflict with the Spanish settlers and their priests, the Black Robes. The Spanish tried to force their ways upon the natives. One of the young Hopi men, Moki, experienced two visions about the future of his people, which closely represent what actually happened in history.

5 Exemplary Introduction Bridge: Try to connect your beginning to your thesis! In The Tomorrow Seeds by Diane L. Burns, a Hopi Indian tribe was in conflict with the Spanish settlers and their priests, the Black Robes. The Spanish tried to force their ways upon the natives. One of the young Hopi men, Moki, experienced two visions about the future of his people, which closely represent what actually happened in history.

6 Exemplary Introduction Thesis: This MUST be the last sentence of your introduction! It CANNOT be a question! In The Tomorrow Seeds by Diane L. Burns, a Hopi Indian tribe was in conflict with the Spanish settlers and their priests, the Black Robes. The Spanish tried to force their ways upon the natives. One of the young Hopi men, Moki, experienced two visions about the future of his people, which closely represent what actually happened in history.

7 Introduction 1 - What is wrong? How can you fix it? Moki has 2 visions about the Hopi people. Moki woke up and took seeds to the top of a mesa. He had seen the place in his dreams. Every morning he checked on the seeds, but he had to hide his plants.

8 Introduction 2 - What is wrong? How can you fix it? The tomorrow seeds was written by Diane L. Burns. The tomorrow seeds tells a story about a boy, Moki, who has visions about the future. Moki has two important visions for the Hopi people, and they are similar to history.

9 Introduction 3 - What is wrong? How can you fix it? In the story the tomorrow seed a boy named Moki has 2 visions. Moki s visions showed him 2 ways to live. The visions were about sharing and were like text 1.

10 Exemplary Body Paragraph 1 The first vision that Moki dreamed was about sharing. In fact, it symbolized how the Spanish and the Hopi could live together in the land. In paragraph two, it stated, But the seeds have their own life, especially these the People s bumpy blue seeds of corn, sakwaq a o, and the red, forbidden kawayvatnga of the Black Robes. Moki planted the two kinds of seeds together. Also, both groups of people cared for their gardens in the same way. In paragraph 14, Moki noticed that the Black Robes were careful in their weeding and harvesting. So were the People. Moki s first vision represented what happened at first when the Spanish first came to the desert Southwest. In text one, paragraph one, it explains that the Spanish were welcomed peacefuly by the pueblo Indians. Just like the seeds grew side-by-side, the Spanish and the Hopi could live in peace together. Moki s first vision represented what happened first in history.

11 Exemplary Body Paragraph 1 The first vision that Moki dreamed was about sharing. In fact, it symbolized how the Spanish and the Hopi could live together in the land. In paragraph two, it stated, But the seeds have their own life, especially these the People s bumpy blue seeds of corn, sakwaq a o, and the red, forbidden kawayvatnga of the Black Robes. Moki planted the two kinds of seeds together. Also, both groups of people cared for their gardens in the same way. In paragraph 14, Moki noticed that the Black Robes were careful in their weeding and harvesting. So were the People. Moki s first vision represented what happened at first when the Spanish first came to the desert Southwest. In text one, paragraph one, it explains that the Spanish were welcomed peacefuly by the pueblo Indians. Just like the seeds grew side-by-side, the Spanish and the Hopi could live in peace together. Moki s first vision represented what happened first in history.

12 Body Paragraph 1 What s wrong? How can you fix it? In article 2, paragraph 14, Moki has two visions. They have different meanings that relate to history. The first dream was about seeds for tomorrow. It was a vision of sharing. The second vision was about a way of not sharing. Moki would not share his seeds.

13 Body Paragraph 2 What s wrong? How can you fix it? Moki decided to follow his visions to plant seeds. There was a conflict between Moki and Pope. Eventually, the People (Hopi) outlawed even the Black Robes garden seeds. Moki planted the seeds anyway. He wanted the People to live in peace with the Black Robes.

14 Your Task Rewrite your introduction. Rewrite one body paragraph. Turn it in, stapled to your original essay, on Friday. You can add up to 15 points to your score.