Help with AICE Global. Paper 1. You ve got this!!!!!

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1 Help with AICE Global Paper 1 You ve got this!!!!!

2 Ques=ons 1a & 1b KNOW what the ques=on is asking! Only do what you need to do! Use direct quota=ons in your answer. Get through these as quickly (but thoroughly) as possible!

3 HELP WITH QUESTION 2 2 STUDY DOCUMENT 1. How convincing is the argument in Document 1 that internet access is a basic human right? In your answer, you should evaluate the strengths and weaknesses of the argument. [12] The claim asserted in Document 1 is not very convincing and seems more of a hypothe=cal than a imminent reality. Though the author poses some quality points about what basic human rights are - all human beings are born free and have the right to an educa=on, the freedom of free expression, and the right to par=cipate in cultural life - he fails at showing why the internet should be added to the UN's declara=on of basic human rights. From the onset of the document, Moore goes to great lengths to emphasize " corrupt leaders, governments, and powerful men [have kept] control of the people by controlling the informa=on." In the first and second paragraphs, he juxtaposes "the beginning of =me" and "today" to highlight the selec=ve control that has transcended the millennia. This lays a founda=on for his argument that the oppression of informa=on is also oppressive to groups of people across =me, which is why he feels all human beings should have access to the internet. By using this parallel of =me, his passion to make a change NOW is even more significant. Though Moore builds his argument on this no=on, his reasoning begins to fall like a house of cards. One of Moore s tenets is that "people can learn to work together to rid themselves of tyranny and oppression." This argument is flawed, however, as there are several billions of people who do have internet access and are privy to a wealth of informa=on, yet tyranny s=ll exists. Thusly, his assump=on that the right to the internet and its vast informa=on will liberate the oppressed from tyrannical rule greatly weakens his argument. To equate the two is erroneous and makes his argument less credible. Moore also supports his asser=on by ci=ng concrete examples. He refers to an incident in Egypt in 2011 when people wielded the internet s power to organize protests through social media. He infuses this specific reference to illustrate why humans should have access to the internet. This par=cular event was covered globally and resonates with a large number of readers from many regions, and it is this relatability that aids in his argument. Aside from his use of concrete examples, Moore s relatability is actually quite limited. Throughout the piece, he prosely=zes that internet should be a human right, but never weighs in on the counter argument. This lack of insight makes the reader wonder if Moore s wi- fi is connected. He men=ons several =mes why all humans should have internet, but he does not acknowledge the caveats with this right. For example, he men=ons that it s a weapon, yet does not elaborate on how that can also be leverage to further oppress people (i.e., propaganda and pedophiles poten=ally luring of innocent children). Moore also comments that the internet is a free resource, but doesn t address that to access it, people ocen need an internet service provider, which does cost money. Because of his lack of ability to see the poten=al problems associated with this issue, his credibility is greatly weakened. Though Moore s inten=ons are noble, his URL (Understanding, Reasoning and Logic) has many errors! Make a JUDGMENT! You need a small intro that states whether D1 is convincing it might help to state how convincing it is. Your body paragraphs should be organized to address the strengths and weaknesses in PEEL format (in 2 more slides, you will see the PEELs.) This par=cular sample is set ups as : STRENGTH WEAKNESS STRENGTH WEAKNESS You can choose to organize it the way you choose, just have at least 4 body paragraphs. Your closer needs to restate your judgment but make sure it s worded as a SOFT, PASSIONATE KISS!

4 HELP WITH QUESTION 2 The claim asserted in Document 1 is not very convincing and seems more of a hypotheacal than a imminent reality. Though the author poses some quality points about what basic human rights are - all human beings are born free and have the right to an educa=on, the freedom of free expression, and the right to par=cipate in cultural life - he fails at showing why the internet should be added to the UN's declaraaon of basic human rights. From the onset of the document, Moore goes to great lengths to emphasize " corrupt leaders, governments, and powerful men [have kept] control of the people by controlling the informa=on." In the first and second paragraphs, he juxtaposes "the beginning Include of =me" a and thesis "today" that to highlight the selec=ve control that has transcended Your first the sentence millennia. This lays a founda=on for his argument that the oppression Be sure to of incorporate focuses on some factors informa=on is also oppressive needs to groups declare of people if D1 across =me, which is why he feels all human beings should the author s have access to the internet. By using this parallel of =me, his passion to in make D1 that a change make NOW it is convincing. is even more argument/claim significant. in D1. Though Moore builds his argument on this convincing no=on, his reasoning (or not) begins to fall like a house of cards. One of Moore s tenets is that "people can learn to work together to rid themselves of tyranny and oppression." This argument is flawed, however, as there are several billions of people who do have internet access and are privy to a wealth of informa=on, yet tyranny s=ll exists. Thusly, his assump=on that the right to the internet and its vast informa=on will liberate the oppressed from tyrannical rule greatly weakens his argument. To equate the two is erroneous and makes his argument less credible. Moore also supports his asser=on by ci=ng concrete examples. He refers to an incident in Egypt in 2011 when people wielded the internet s power to organize protests through social media. He infuses this specific reference to illustrate why humans should have access to the internet. This par=cular event was covered globally and resonates with a large number of readers from many regions, and it is this relatability that aids in his argument. Aside from his use of concrete examples, Moore s relatability is actually quite limited. Throughout the piece, he prosely=zes that End internet with a should sentence be a human that right, reinforces but never weighs in on the counter argument. This lack of insight makes the reader wonder if Moore s wi- fi is connected. He men=ons several =mes why all humans should have internet, your but he declara=on does not acknowledge whether the D1 caveats is with this right. For example, he men=ons that it s a weapon, yet convincing. does not elaborate MAKE on IT how POP! that can also be leverage to further oppress people (i.e., propaganda and pedophiles poten=ally luring of innocent children). Moore also comments that the internet is a free resource, but doesn t NICE address KISS! that to access it, people ocen need an internet service provider, which does cost money. Because of his lack of ability to see the poten=al problems associated with this issue, his credibility is greatly weakened. Though his intenaons are noble, his URL (Understanding, Reasoning and Logic) has many errors!

5 HELP WITH QUESTION 2 - PEEL FORMAT Start your PEEL! POINT: What is the first aspect of D1 s argument that makes it stronger (or weaker) EVIDENCE/ EXAMPLE: Include a solid but brief example that best supports your point. ELABORATION: Explain how your example from above makes the author s argument strong (or weak). LINK: Make a connec=on between your elabora=on, your point, and your thesis.

6 Your first sentence needs to declare if D2 is stronger (or weaker) than D1. WHAT YOUR INTRO AND ONE BODY PARAGRAPH SHOULD LOOK LIKE! YOU NEED THREE to FOUR BODY PARAGRAPHS! Your second sentence, the thesis, should focus on three factors in D2 that make it stronger (or weaker). Be sure to incorporate the author s argument/ claim in D2. 3 Study Documents 1 and 2. To what extent is the argument in Document 2 stronger than that in Document 1? [14] When juxtaposing the two documents, the argument in Document 2 is stronger. Where Document 1 lacks, Document 2 delivers: Freedland includes mul=ple perspec=ves, infuses expert tes=mony, and incorporates real- world examples. As a result of these techniques, he bolsters his argument that internet can be as harmful as it is helpful and establishes greater credibility than Moore in Document 1. From the beginning of Document 2, the author shares that he engage[d] in a liole light crowd- sourcing to gather data for his par=cular research and strengthen his claim. The nuggets of informa=on that he acquired during the process is woven into several paragraphs throughout his piece. For example, in paragraphs 3-5, quotes from tweets are included to support his argument. One respondent laments he spends more =me Google- ing than thinking, while the the biggest complaint was about the damage to concentrate for sustained periods. By sharing what is resonated in social media, it helps to establish his credibility. It is evident he solicited, considered, and included different perspec=ves. Instead of Freedland s argument being from a solitary viewpoint, like Document 1 that did not include different people s perspec=ves, his is more of a collabora=on of views. Though this aspect of his research had its flaw and was limited in vantage points e.g., the people polled had to have a Twioer account, leaving out many who didn t Freedland s=ll did more to include varying perspec=ves than Moore did. Start your PEEL! POINT: What is the first aspect of D2 s argument that makes it stronger (or weaker) EVIDENCE/ EXAMPLE: Include a solid but brief example that best supports your point. ELABORATION: Explain how your example from above makes the author s argument strong (or weak). LINK: Make a connec=on between your elabora=on, your point, and your thesis.

7 Your first sentence needs to declare if D2 is stronger (or weaker) than D1. Your second sentence, the thesis, should focus on three factors WHAT YOUR INTRO & ONE BODY PARAGRAPH SHOULD LOOK LIKE! YOU NEED 3-4 BODY PARAGRAPHS! THIS IS SET UP FOR A D2 > D1 RESPONSE (IF YOU BELIEVE D2 > D1, you would do D2-, D1+, D2+) in D2 that make it stronger (or weaker). Be sure to incorporate the author s argument/ claim in D2. D2 + D1 - D2 - Start your PEEL! POINT: What is the first aspect of D2 s argument that makes it stronger (or weaker) EVIDENCE/ EXAMPLE: Include a solid but brief example that best supports your this point. ELABORATION: Explain how your example from above makes the author s argument strong (or weak). LINK: Make a connec=on between your elabora=on, your point, and your thesis.