Lucy: Analytical Paragraph

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1 Lucy: Analytical Paragraph What a piece of work is a man, How noble in Reason, how infinite in faculties, in form and moving how express and admirable, In action how like an Angel! In apprehension how like a god, the beauty of the world, the paragon of animals ---William Shakespeare, Hamlet In the above quote, Shakespeare attests to the rank and excellence of humankind, which he considers closer to the ranks of the angels in their deeds and to a god in their concern. However, in his letter to Lucy, Dr. Stone writes, when I set out on this course, I was young and idealistic and perhaps even a bit angry at the world I saw you in the abstract as an idealized person, a strategy for saving the beautiful bonobos and for somehow redeeming mankind all at one go (Gonzales 305). Dr. Stone explains that the source of his anger towards and desire to redeem humankind stems from the arguably irreparable deterioration of the human condition. Prompt: Is Lawrence Gonzales Lucy a denunciation of Man as the Lowest Animal or the redemption of Man as the Paragon of Animals? Google Docs Folder: Writing Assignments File Name: AP_Lucy_Last Name Due Date: Friday, 9/14 Length: Approx.500 words Points: 50 points Preparing to write this analytical paragraph involves choosing a position (the what ), determining your reasons (the why ), and finding supporting evidence (the how ). WHAT IS YOUR POSITION (Is Man the Lowest Animal or the Paragon of Animals?) WHY (Reasons) HOW DOES THE TEXT SUPPORT THIS POSITION / REASONS (Lucy)

2 Brainstorming Do not choose a position prematurely. Instead, brainstorm your strongest ideas for both sides of the argument using specific reasons. For each reason, find supporting passages from Lucy mark them in your book and write the page numbers next to the reason. Man As Lowest Animal Man as Paragon of Animals Choosing a Position Evaluate your reasons and supporting evidence for both sides in the above chart. Choose your position. WRITE YOUR POSITION HERE [ what ]: Man is Paragon of Animals WRITE YOUR REASON HERE [ why ]: Our FAITH gives us strength and wisdom in challenging circumstances

3 Writing your Claim Now draft your claim this is the main argument of your analytical paragraph. This sentence must include the position you are taking (the what ), and the reason(s) behind your claim (the why ). Don t just state in your topic sentence that Man is the Lowest Animal or the Paragon of Animals. State why. Choose One: Option #1: Comparing Man to Man Option #2: Comparing Animal to Man Sample Template [Transitional Device] [Twain/Bukowski/Goodall] [argument], [Lawrence Gonzales Lucy] is [choose position], [transitional device] [reason]. Sample Thesis [Although] [Twain] condemns Man as the lowest animal whose his religion is a source of hypocrisy and bloody conflict, [Lawrence Gonzales Lucy] is [a redemption of humans as the paragon of animals], because faith enables Man to emerge stronger and wiser from challenging circumstances. WRITE THE ROUGH DRAFT OF YOUR CLAIM HERE:

4 Supporting Evidence #1 Supporting Evidence #2 and #3 Choosing Supporting Evidence Template [Transitional Device] [Twain/Bukowski/Goodall] [argument], [Lawrence Gonzales Lucy] is [choose position], [transitional device] [reason]. Sample Thesis [Although] [Twain] condemns Man as the lowest animal whose his religion is a source of hypocrisy and bloody conflict, [Lawrence Gonzales Lucy] is [a redemption of humans as the paragon of animals], because faith enables Man to emerge stronger and wiser from challenging circumstances. Comment [b1]: Supporting Evidence #1 Comment [b2]: Supporting Evidence #2 and #3 Type of Example from Lucy Context Direct Quote Example from Lucy supporting Twain s claim that religion is a source of hypocrisy and conflict Who What When Where Example from Lucy of faith and strength in a challenging circumstance Example from Lucy of faith and wisdom in a challenging circumstance Who Lucy What Lucy remembers a conversation with her father about prayer after sensing that the man who entered her room to retrieve a rifle will harm her When After Lucy is returned to her cage from Intensive Care Where Eisner s lab Who What When Where [Lucy] prayed even without believing in gods to the forest to arrange things in a beneficial way Lucy prayed to her god or her long-lost forest. For enlightenment. For wisdom waiting on the universe for an answer she felt an electrical crackling of energy surge through her belly and legs the one right thing that she had to do rose within her Lucy rolled back, pulling her knees to her chest, and kicked him in the head with both feet (Gonzales 255).

5 WRITE YOUR SUPPORTING EVIDENCE IN THE TABLE BELOW: Type of Ex. from Lucy Context Direct Quote Who What When Where Who What When Where Who What When Where

6 Writing Context Sentences In 1-2 well-written sentences, provide information about the passage from which you selected the direct quote --- Who is involved in this scene? What is going on in this scene? When does this occur in the book? Where does this scene take place? Sample Context Sentence After Lucy is returned to her cage in Dr. Eisner s lab from Intensive Care, she senses danger when a man enters her room to retrieve a rifle. As she struggles to plan an escape, she remembers a conversation with her father about prayer. Comment [b3]: WHO Comment [b4]: WHEN Comment [b5]: WHERE Comment [b6]: WHAT WRITE YOUR CONTEXT SENTENCES BELOW: Context Sentence for SE #1 Context Sentence for SE #2 Context Sentence for SE #3

7 Quote Integration You must always integrate your quotes with the preceding context sentence. There are several ways to annotate a quote: Technique 1: A complete context sentence (independent clause) followed by a colon. Note how the set up before the colon is a full sentence that could stand on its own. After Lucy is returned to her cage in Dr. Eisner s lab from Intensive Care, she senses danger when a man enters her room to retrieve a rifle. As she struggles to plan an escape, she remembers a conversation with her father about prayer: [Lucy] prayed even without believing in gods to her god or her long-lost forest. For enlightenment. For wisdom she felt an electrical crackling of energy surge through her belly and legs the one right thing that she had to do rose within her Lucy rolled back, pulling her knees to her chest, and kicked him in the head with both feet (Gonzales 255). Technique 2: Partial sentence (fragment) set-up that sets up a dialogue, statement, thought, etc. Partial sentence quotations should be introduced by a signal verb such as says followed by a comma. Note how the set-up before the comma is not a full sentence - it can t stand on its own. It s a partial sentence (fragment). After Lucy is returned to her cage in Dr. Eisner s lab from Intensive Care, she senses danger when a man enters her room to retrieve a rifle. Remembering a conversation with her father as she struggles to plan an escape, Lucy prays, even without believing in gods to her god or her long-lost forest. For enlightenment. For wisdom she felt an electrical crackling of energy surge through her belly and legs the one right thing that she had to do rose within her Lucy rolled back, pulling her knees to her chest, and kicked him in the head with both feet (Gonzales 255). Technique 3: Partial sentence quotations can also be introduced by a signal verb followed by the word that and no comma. After Lucy is returned to her cage in Dr. Eisner s lab from Intensive Care, she senses danger when a man enters her room to retrieve a rifle. Remembering a conversation with her father as she struggles to plan an escape, Lucy realized that [she] prayed even without believing in gods to her god or her long-lost forest. For enlightenment. For wisdom she felt an electrical crackling of energy surge through her belly and legs the one right thing that she had to do rose within her Lucy rolled back, pulling her knees to her chest, and kicked him in the head with both feet (Gonzales 255). Technique 4: Partial sentence set-up completed by a quoted phrase. No punctuation is necessary between your words and the author s words when they flow together as one, non-run-on sentence that doesn t need a comma. After Lucy is returned to her cage in Dr. Eisner s lab from Intensive Care, she senses danger when a man enters her room to retrieve a rifle. Remembering a conversation with her father as she struggles to plan an escape, Lucy prayed even without believing in gods to her god or her long-lost forest. For enlightenment. For wisdom she felt an electrical crackling of energy surge through her belly and legs the one right thing that she had to do rose within her Lucy rolled back, pulling her knees to her chest, and kicked him in the head with both feet (Gonzales 255).

8 Brackets and Ellipses In direct quotations, enclose in brackets any words you change or add, and indicate any deletions with ellipsis points. Try to limit the amount of times you change quotes with brackets. Example: [Lucy] looked like a teenage girl. She spoke, she smiled, she laughed Yet the residue of the revelation remained as a faint and nagging discomfort (Gonzalez 84). *Note: I replaced She with Lucy using brackets. I removed words from the quote, so I used ellipses ( ). Signal Verbs acknowledges concludes disputes opposes suggests advises concurs emphasizes remarks thinks agrees confirms expresses replies writes allows criticizes interprets reports answers declares lists responds asserts describes objects reveals believes disagrees observes says claims discusses offers states PRACTICE INTEGRATING YOUR QUOTES HERE: Supporting Evidence #1: Supporting Evidence #2: Supporting Evidence #3:

9 Analytical Paragraph Structure Claim (thesis): This sentence must include the specific claim, or position, you are taking in the paragraph (the what ) and the reason behind your claim (the why ). Don t just state in your topic sentence that Man is the Lowest Animal or the Paragon of Animals. State why. Supporting Evidence #1 Transition + Context Sentence: In 1-2 well-written sentences, provide information about the scene or passage from which you selected the direct quote --- Who is in this scene? What is going on in this scene? When does this scene occur in the book? Where does this scene take place? Direct Quote: A supporting passage from the text (approx. 3 lines typed) properly integrated and cited Analysis: a developed discussion that addresses the following questions: How/why does this passage illustrate your reason? What does this quote show about your reason? How does the connotative meaning of key words or images in the quote illustrate your reason? How does this quote support your position? Supporting Evidence #2 Transition + Context Sentence: In 1-2 well-written sentences, provide information about the passage from which you selected the direct quote --- Who is involved in this scene? What is going on in this scene? When does this occur in the book? Where does this scene take place? Direct Quote: A supporting passage from the text (approx. 3 lines typed) properly integrated and cited Analysis: a developed discussion that addresses the following questions: How does this quote connect to or build upon the previous quote? How/why does this passage illustrate your reason? What does this quote show about your reason? How does the connotative meaning of key words or images in the quote illustrate your reason? How does this quote support your position? Supporting Evidence #3 Transition + Context Sentence: In 1-2 well-written sentences, provide information about the passage from which you selected the direct quote --- Who is involved in this scene? What is going on in this scene? When does this occur in the book? Where does this scene take place? Direct Quote: A substantial selection from the text (approx. 3 lines typed) properly integrated and cited Analysis: a developed discussion that addresses the following questions: How does this quote connect to or build upon the previous quotes? How/why does this passage illustrate your reason? What does this quote show about your reason? How does the connotative meaning of key words or images in the quote illustrate your reason? How does this quote support your position? Warrant: In a well-written sentence, respond to the so what? Based on the reasons and supporting evidence you ve provided, So what if Man is the Lowest Animal or the Paragon of Animals?

10 Full Name Date Period Lucy Analytical Paragraph I. Claim A. Supporting Evidence #1 1. Transition + Context Sentence 2. Integrated Quote + Citation 3. Analysis B. Supporting Evidence #2 1. Transition + Context Sentence 2. Integrated Quote + Citation 3. Analysis C. Supporting Evidence #3 1. Transition + Context Sentence 2. Integrated Quote + Citation 3. Analysis II. Warrant

11 Full Name Date Period Lucy Analytical Paragraph The first sentence of an analytical paragraph is your claim, a well-developed sentence that responds to the prompt, clearly stating your position ( what ) and the reason(s) ( why ). After the claim, you must use a Comment [t7]: Book titles are italicizes or underlined Comment [t8]: Heading is centered and bold Comment [t9]: A new paragraph is indented Comment [t10]: Transitional Device transitional device to smoothly lead in to your first context sentence, the set-up for your direct quote. In this sentence, you will provide information about the scene from which the following quote was taken: You should choose a strong, relevant, substantial selection. It shouldn t be too literal, off-topic, or too short. Copy the quote exactly as it appears in your book (Gonzales 3). Now you will respond to the analysis questions in a fully developed and thoughtful manner. Your discussion should be specific to the direct quote. Talk about how the direct quote supports your reason/position. Think about the connotative meaning of key words and images in the quote. Look for images, symbols, and patterns (cause/effect, comparison/contrast, etc.). Once again, use a transitional device to smoothly lead in to your second context sentence, the set-up for your direct quote. In this sentence, you will provide information about the scene of a quote that is a strong, relevant, substantial selection. It shouldn t be too literal, off-topic, or too short. Copy the quote exactly as it appears in your book (Gonzales 103). Now you will respond to the analysis questions in a full developed and thoughtful manner. Your discussion should be specific to the direct quote. Talk about how this quote connects to the previous quote and how it supports your reason/position. Think about the connotative meaning of key words and images in the quote. Look for images, symbols, and patterns (cause/effect, comparison/contrast, etc.). Finally, use another transitional device to smoothly lead in to your third context sentence, the set-up for your direct quote. In this sentence, you will provide information about the scene from which the quote was taken. Perhaps, in this quote, the character reflects, Your selection should be strong, relevant, substantial selection. You may find it more effective to find a narrative selection (instead of dialogue) that conveys the same idea. Your quote selection shouldn t be too literal, off-topic, or too short. Copy the quote exactly as it appears in your book (Gonzales 300). Now you will respond to the analysis Comment [t11]: Direct quotations always need to be integrated with your context sentence. Refer to the quote integration handout for direction / examples of three different quote integration techniques. This is an example of technique #1 Comment [t12]: All quotation must be cited according to MLA format. (Last Name #). Notice that the punctuation at the end of the sentence has been moved to outside the parentheses. Comment [t13]: Transitional device Comment [t14]: Direct quotations always need to be integrated with your context sentence. Refer to the quote integration handout for direction / examples of three different quote integration techniques. This is an example of technique #2 Comment [t15]: All quotation must be cited according to MLA format. (Last Name #). Notice that the punctuation at the end of the sentence has been moved to outside the parentheses. Comment [t16]: Transitional Device Comment [t17]: Direct quotations always need to be integrated with your context sentence. Refer to the quote integration handout for direction / examples of three different quote integration techniques. This is an example of technique #3 Comment [t18]: All quotation must be cited according to MLA format. (Last Name #). Notice that the punctuation at the end of the sentence has been moved to outside the parentheses.

12 questions in a full developed and thoughtful manner. Your discussion should be specific to the direct quote. Talk about how the direct quote connects to or builds upon the previous quotes. Think about the connotative meaning of key words and images in the quote. Look for images, symbols, and patterns (cause/effect, comparison/contrast, etc.). In the end, you will conclude your paragraph with a sentence that responds to the so what? or deeper meaning and significance of your argument. Comment [b19]: Transitional device to lead in to the warrant Comment [t20]: Be sure to proofread your paragraph for spelling/grammar. Formatting: Arial, Times, Book Antiqua, or Garamond font 12 pt. size Double-spaced